Memento Mori

1.) I don't really like Carrie all that much, mainly because she's not that realistic. William is more realistic, and I like him much better. However, this is your story, ...

It was easy to read, but I'd love to see more characterization there. It's a good start to any story. I'd just change the title, if I were you. Just ...

It's a nice train of thought, but it's not a story really. It's very realistic though. Good one.

Thanks for the tips. I'll keep them in mind when I write my next story. :D

. I'm pretty sure that the part where Javier took the girl was a bit choppy. Any suggestions on how to fix that? It's not that bad, really. In fact, ...

Thanks for the tips. I'll go fix my mistakes now.

I don't find them the happiest days of one's life. Here is my comparison: School - You pay - You pay them and you get scolded - You don't have ...

This is my first work of fiction. Please read and review. ~Start~ She stormed to her room and slammed the door quite loudly. “I hate her,” she chanted over and ...

Although a bit confusing at times, I think it's pretty good. I'll read the next chapter if I find it.

My views still don't change, even if you were using protection. Protection only reduces the chances of getting pregnant. It's not absolute. Unless of course you got tubal ligation (did ...

Great story! I love it, but Prince Charming is a little vulgar though. But then, he's what makes the story funny. I like this version of Snow White better than ...

It's all right, and Magnificent_ego covered everything I was going to say and more. One question though: What time period does this occur in? Did you make it up, or ...

Right and wrong are merely two points of view. If you were the "villain", you're likely to have a plausible explanation that would justify your actions. Right is simply your ...

I don't really mind being next to either, simply because their belief is none of my business. I shouldn't judge them simply because they believe in different things.

Death penalty is the most practical choice for punishment of extreme crimes. I believe that you shouldn't put a person in jail for too long: jail isn't so bad when ...